Jacob Finding His Way Discussion Page:
Dear Reader’s:
On this page you can come on in and discuss the story of “Jacob Finding His Way”. I, or my editors will be in here at least once a day answering any and all questions. If you want a specific question answered by me or one of my editors, please direct the question to that person. You can still email me any thing you would like. I just putting this here to make it easier for you as readers to comment or ask questions. This is the page where you can make the comments, suggestions or ask questions on.
Warning:
If you are coming into this page not reading all the chapters and do not want to get spoilers to the story, please leave the page. On this page you will run into spoilers and I do not want you not land up reading the story on your own becasue it has been ruined for you.
Having read the first of your “Jacob Finding His Way” I want to say you have done a very good job of keeping track of the story line.
There are a couple of things that I have noticed. One there is a lot of syntax errors in the sentence structure and use of incorrect words throughout the novel. These should be caught by your editors.
Second, the transitions between points of view or from one site to another would be better indicated by as group fo 6 stars “******” when changing from say the schools to the offices to the hotel. etc. It makes it easier for the reader to recognize a scene change.
All 80 chapters of JFHW were great an look forward to starting Beneath the Mask. Seems to be the logical progression.
Hey Everyone,
I hope you are all doing well. As you all know, I stopped writing and posting “Jacob Finding His Way” so I could get “Shadow of My Father” caught up and matching with the time line. That has now happened and I am going to start working once again on “Jacob Finding His Way”. As soon as I write this update, I plan to begin writing the next chapter. I have so many ideas and can’t wait to get them on paper.
I wanted to take a bit of time and remind everyone what’s going on with this saga. It was the 19th of September the last time there was a posting of this story. I hope that posting this synopsis will allow you to easily get back in the swing of the story without having to go back and re-read chapters.
Jacob; where to even begin with that guy? The last we heard, he was getting home with Dewayne from their double date with Alex and Matt. He had sung a love song to Dewayne on their date. Many of you didn’t like that and want Josh as the one and only person to sing. I don’t think I am going to go that way with Jacob. He already has his hands full with everything else that is going on in his life from his company and Al leaving him in charge to the student council election. The election is coming up very soon and you might be surprised on the outcome. Oh, and I can promise you in Chapter 81 there is going to be a heavy sex scene between Jacob and Dewayne. That’s something to really look forward to come this Monday.
Chase is trying to figure his way out of the darkness. It looks like he has found his way and it looks like it is going to be with a guy at his side. But you guys know me, I am evil and I may change that, who knows. Just keep tuned in to this story and “Beneath the Mask” for your answers to that that plot.
Jeremy is still around and will be come back to the forefront very soon along with Andy and the kid he helped out of jail. That is a huge plot line that will be around for a while. Still don’t really know where I will go with it, but I promise whatever I do with it, it will keep you on your toes.
Don’t forget about the house burning down. Who did it? No one figured that one out yet as far as I know. Keep in mind what I did with the pictures of Cesar and Josh. The person you aren’t thinking about is going to be the one that did it. Keep sending in your guesses on that one and maybe one of you might get it.
Anyways back to the house. We know it is going up, but the question is when will it be done and the guys moving in. It has to be getting a little too crowded in the hotel. The last we saw Alex and Joey were at each others throats. I think it is going to take Jacob to come in and fix that problem.
The police chief has been causing trouble for a while and he is currently out of a job. However the guy seems to be very Teflon coated and gets out of things cleanly. I wonder if his luck has run out or not. Also don’t forget about the evidence he planted that morning. Who is he setting up or trying to set up for the killing and the burning down of the abandoned home? You’ll have come back to get your answer to that one as well.
Man there is so much going on, I cannot remember it all. This is just a little reminder of the current plots, but there are a lot more out there that are still open: Andy Sr. taking over the car dealerships!: The new CEO!: Dewayne’s mother and father coming out of the woodwork!: Derrick and that whole drama about the kidnapping!: Patricia what is going on there?: The new security for Jacob!: Jacob offering cars to Principal Michaels for the Driver ED program!: Jacob promoting Carlos’ father to service manager!: Joey appearing on the scene and is in line for the same ROTC position Jacob is up for!
It goes on and on! There are so many plots going on you need to come back and see where they go. There will be lot of new plots coming that will throw the story into a tail spin.
So, please rejoin the story with the upcoming chapter on Monday the 7th. If you don’t, you’ll really be missing out! LOL!
Grateful writer,
J.P.G.
I wan’t to find out if Marcos cheated to get elected!
Sorry about your mom. Hope she gets well and doesn’t suffer.
I’ve completed all 89 chapters of Jacob Finding His Way. You tell a great story, but like many readers, I find there are too many plot lines. My suggestion is that you end this story at the end of Jacob’s Junior Year and start a new story such as Jacob Finding His Way Part 2 or Jacob Finding His Way – Senior Year or something like that.
I also find there are far too many words. I started skimming in order to find the story and get away from all the unnecessary details. Here is something typical out off the top of my head, but I think demonstrates what I mean. “The boys walked out to Jacob’s truck. Jacob unlocked it and everyone got in. He started the engine and backed out of the driveway. Everyone was quiet and had nothing to say until they got on the road. Jacob misses Dewayne and is thinking about him all the time. He can’t wait until he gets home to see him. They arrive at school. Jacob parks the truck etc. etc. etc.
How about this? “The guys arrived at school at 8:00 and everyone headed in different directions. Jacob had been surprised at how quiet everyone was on the way to school, but he didn’t care because he was thinking about Dewayne.” There is telling here, but it’s far more general.
The other thing is something I mentioned in an e-mail, which is that you need to show and not tell. I gave a couple examples and will send you a few more as soon as I get a chance. You don’t need to tell the reader everything Jacob and the guys are thinking or doing. (See example above) Show it by their actions or what they say. This will tighten up your stories and make them easier to read.
I stuck with this story until the end (only to find out it’s not the end) because I just didn’t want to stop one to read another. Most readers are like that. I glanced at the other stories, but wasn’t about ready to go off on a tangent when there is so much to read in Jacob Finding His Way. This brings up the point that each story should be complete unto itself.
There’s sure nothing wrong with writing other stories while working on this one, but they should be stories completely unrelated to the others except that they may share characters. But each story should be complete unto itself with sequels based on the previous stories. Jacob Finding His Way should be just that at least through high school. But the story has gotten so long you’ll have to write another who knows how many thousands of words just to get him through high school.
You obviously enjoy writing and I wish I wrote as much as you. But there is a need for self-discipline and creating concise well-written stories in which the author doesn’t ramble on and mention every detail. The only details that should be mentioned are the ones that are absolutely necessary to the story. I could really care less about the decision process to go cowboy for the wedding or where they rented the stuff except in passing. “They decided to go cowboy because they lived in Texas and Wyoming.”
You are very good at following the story line as was mentioned by an earlier comment. But you missed dealing with the scars on Jacob’s chest and back, which were operated on in addition to his legs.
Anyway, it is not my intention to be negative but to be helpful because I think you have a great gift for story telling. But you have to keep your imagination in check at times and make sure everything is plausible. In the real world Jacob would be dead after having cancer, being shot a couple times, being beaten who knows how many times while still sick with internal injuries or on the mend from them, and being burned and who knows how many other disasters. He may be young, but he’s not Superman.
The one thing I really like is how Dewayne didn’t care about the ugliness of Jacob’s scars or of his need to take care of him when he is sick. That being said, I think that being in a committed relationship so young eliminates many other possibilities in life. Fortunately, they don’t have to worry about getting pregnant but I wouldn’t particularly be excited about my son having a committed relationship with a girl where the girl moved in and they slept together all the time. But then I’m a bit conservative that way.
It has nothing to do with morals, but with the importance of being young and free from commitments and responsibilities until later in life. I admit, each of us has different needs and that should be taken into consideration. I live by myself and love it because I have the need for solitude and lack of commitment. But then I’ve raised two kids who are now in their 30’s. But as I read your story, I wonder what it would have been like to have been in a committed sexual and personal relationship when I was 16. I went steady and was a successful athlete and all that, but it all seems so empty for some reason. But then life can be that way at times and I now enjoy my grandchildren who tell me how much they love me and how they will miss me when I’m gone.
I’m not sure how much of this story is fiction and how much non-fiction and I wish I knew. I do believe a young person could run a large company with the right resources, but I find it hard to believe that Jacob can juggle ROTC, Student Council, his relationship with his friends and family, and all the different companies without having a nervous breakdown. As the old Chinese proverb says, “There are no limits to the bounds of moderation.” Keep that in mind as you write. That doesn’t mean there aren’t some big conflicts because a story is nothing without conflict, but there shouldn’t be so many that the reader goes crazy trying to keep track of them and has a nervous breakdown themselves from reading the story.
Wow. Talk about a wandering diatribe. I can’t believe I spent time reading all of that.
Jacob, these are your stories and your website. Tell your stories the way that you want to. That’s what makes them special, that they are heartfelt and flow as if you are sitting next to the reader tell him the story as it happened. That is one of the things that make them so special.
Sure, there may be details that are absolutely not necessary. But you aren’t writing an analytical report. You’re telling a tale. A tale set in a fictional world where a teen CAN run a large company, survive numerous maladies and still come out on top.
Maybe the reason Duke can’t keep up with the multiple plots is because he doesn’t have the patience to read without trying to skim for the high points. Doing that he misses the true essence of the stories.
Keep with the good work, there are many of us that look forward to and savor each chapter and thank you for every word.
I respect your abilities and perseverance, my world would be much dimmer without your continuing stories to look forward to. If I ever garner the courage to put my story down “on paper” like my friend keeps urging me to, you will be the first that I seek out for advice.
Keep your chin up. We’re all keeping a good thought for you.
wnen are more of jacob finding his way comimg on i got up to 93 now it has stoped ty dave
When are the next chapters of ‘Jacob Finding His Way’ and ‘Regrets and Heartaches’ going to be posted? The waiting is killing me!
hello all just like to say am really glad i found this story by the second chapter i was almost in tears not easy to admit to coming from a 20 year old British guy
the chapters for this story are few and far between, wish some new chapters for the 4 top stories would be posted, sorry for bein harsh but i would like to know what is happening in the stories
Zandra
Don’t be sorry. I know updates to my original four stories are not coming in the normal rate like they use to. I’m still going through personal items here at home still dealing with the passing of my mother. It is taking a lot of my time up, taking away from my writing. That isn’t the only reason. I’m also having a hard time right now writing in my four stories. As you know they are based on actual events in my life, at least Jacob Finding His Way and Regrets and Heartaches. Some of the plots in Shadow of My Father and Beneath the Mask happened in my life, but most of those two stories are pure fiction. Because of how my world has been turned up side down it is hard for me to get back into those stories, but I promise I will. In the next couple of weeks you will start seeing chapters posting for those four stories. Please be patient and I promise you you won’t regret it.
Thank you
J.P.G.
i am sorry for your lose, and i forgot all about reading about your mother passing, you take your time and get the things that your have to do with first, but remember you take care of yourself first and everything else will fall in place for you, take care and i will just keep rereading these stories of yours, god bless and stay safe
Hey Jacob, when you start posting the rewrite of this story I hope you will have a new spot under the original story title for the rewrite title. I’ll be waiting for the new chapters. You are still a super fantastic writer.
Stay healthy and be happy and prosperous.
George
I have been waiting for awhile now for updates to all the stories but nothing is forthcomming last update i have is Aug 24,2013 and here we are just a few days from saying good bye to the month of Sept 2013, Can some one please tell us when a update will be out. I really enjoy the stories and miss them a lot just hope that this isnt the end of the stories
Thank you
LewisS
Ditto’s on what Lewis S says.
I love your stories and I wish you the best. However Im done waiting
I’m done waiting also.10 months is too long. Consentrate on a couple of stories, instead of 20.
Sorry.
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It’s wonderful that you are getting ideas from this article as well as from our discussion made at this time.